Good start. I just skimmed it quickly. I sounds a bit like mine, but I'm OK with that (I'm flattered, right?) I'll read the whole thing tomorrow. Good job.

Leesonma 02:52, 28 September 2007 (UTC)

I know, but thinking into the mindset of someone else is kind of hard so I used yours as an inspiration to start per say. It will eventually shape into something good I hope, and thanks for talking to me with this. Most likely, I will be talking to you throughout the whole thing about this. =)

Amaetha 05:49, 29 September 2007 (UTC)

OK, I read the whole thing. It's interesting. In other words, I want to read more. That's a good thing. It has a couple of grammar errors, and a few style issues. That's good, too, because, now I get to see how you AND your writing partners handle improving eachother's work. Very good.

Leesonma 16:57, 29 September 2007 (UTC)